The challenge today is to create a short renga with the given haiku, both themed "evening", with a maximum of eight stanza and at least four stanza.
Here are the two haiku by Jane we worked with: they are in red, my reply is blue.
© Jane Reichhold
© Jane Reichhold
Late Autumn Evening
evening comes
wrapped in sea fog
tied with webs
falling on my damp body
as the moon hides behind clouds
evening sea fog
descending into sun-dried grass
sweaty lovers
lay quietly wrapped together
moist evening air cooling them
How to create a Renga, one poet writes the first stanza, which is three lines long with a total of seventeen syllables. The next poet adds the second stanza, a couplet with seven syllables per line. The third stanza repeats the structure of the first and the fourth repeats the second, alternating in this pattern until the poem’s end.
Beautiful Elsie!
ReplyDeleteThanks Linda, so happy you have remembered me on Blogspot. Hope your weekend is perfect and it's not too cold for you yet.
DeleteBeautifully done, Elsie!
ReplyDeleteHi Kim, I appreciate your comment, it's nice meeting you again. Happy days with lots of peace my friend.
DeleteA beauty, Elsie!
DeleteHi Elsie...glad to see you here :)
ReplyDeleteAwesome set Elsie
ReplyDeleteCarpe Diem: 'Seize the Day'!!!
ReplyDeleteThat was my passed-away girl's
favorite expression...
Thank you.
Love you.
Cya soon.
be@peace.