Carpe Diem #1541 Late Autumn Evening

Carpe Diem #1541 Late Autumn Evening

The challenge today is to create a short renga with the given haiku, both themed "evening", with a maximum of eight stanza and at least four stanza.

Here are the two haiku by Jane we worked with: they are in red, my reply is blue.
© Jane Reichhold

Late Autumn Evening

evening comes

wrapped in sea fog

tied with webs

falling on my damp body

as the moon hides behind clouds

evening sea fog

descending into sun-dried grass

sweaty lovers

lay quietly wrapped together 

moist evening air cooling them

How to create a Renga, one poet writes the first stanza, which is three lines long with a total of seventeen syllables. The next poet adds the second stanza, a couplet with seven syllables per line. The third stanza repeats the structure of the first and the fourth repeats the second, alternating in this pattern until the poem’s end.